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I recent years the behavior of fans at sporting events is becoming worse and worse. In Russia there is "The law of the fans", which prohibits to bring on competitions alcohol, drugs, weapons, fireworks and dyes, some audio devices. But what is the reason of bad behavior?
Firstly, today many people have become serious about their enthusiasm of sport idols, and it leads to aggression at sporting events. When fans of different teams cannot find a compromise, they start fights. If one team loses, the fans of another team make a debauch. And the same cases happen often enough. And that's too bad.
Secondly, at the present days to get involved in sports is just fashionable. Many people go to sports events not because they want, but because now "so many people do it". On the Internet there are "selfy", made to prove someone something, "Look, I was at a football game, I'm cool". The society deteriorates and doesn't notice it.
This is just some of the reasons why the behavior of fans gets worse. People should think about their priorities and remember, that sport is, first and foremost, strength, valor and diligence, but not fighting, screaming and "selfy".
The correct version:
In recent years the behavior of fans at sporting events is becoming worse and worse.
In Russia there is "The law of the fans", which prohibits to bringing alcohol, drugs, weapons, fireworks and dyes, some audio devices to competitions. But what is the reason for bad behavior?
Firstly, today many people have become serious about their enthusiasm of sport idols, and it leads to aggression at sporting events.When fans of different teams cannot find a compromise, they start fights.If one team loses, the fans of another team make a debauch.And the same cases happen often enough.And that's too bad.
Secondly, nowadays to get involved in sports is just fashionable. Many people go to sports events not because they want, but because now "so many people do it". On the Internet there are "selfy", made to prove someone something, "Look, I was at a football game, I'm cool". The society deteriorates and doesn't notice it.
This is just some of the reasons why the behavior of fans gets worse. People should think about their priorities and remember, that sport is, first and foremost, strength, valor and diligence, but not fighting, screaming and "selfy".
In Russia there is "The law of the fans", which prohibits to bringing alcohol, drugs, weapons, fireworks and dyes, some audio devices to competitions. But what is the reason for bad behavior?
Firstly, today many people have become serious about their enthusiasm of sport idols, and it leads to aggression at sporting events.When fans of different teams cannot find a compromise, they start fights.If one team loses, the fans of another team make a debauch.And the same cases happen often enough.And that's too bad.
Secondly, nowadays to get involved in sports is just fashionable. Many people go to sports events not because they want, but because now "so many people do it". On the Internet there are "selfy", made to prove someone something, "Look, I was at a football game, I'm cool". The society deteriorates and doesn't notice it.
This is just some of the reasons why the behavior of fans gets worse. People should think about their priorities and remember, that sport is, first and foremost, strength, valor and diligence, but not fighting, screaming and "selfy".
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